The "Aluminum" passage was developed by Dr. Roy O'Donnell and is reprinted from Kellogg Hunt, Syntactic Maturity in School Children and Adults. Monographs of the Society for Research in Child Development. 35 (1, Serial No. 134.) 1970. 11-12.
Directions: Read the passage all the way through. You will notice that the sentences are short and choppy. Study the passage, and then rewrite it in a better way. You may combine sentences, change the order of words, and omit words that are repeated too many times. But try not to leave out any of the information.
Aluminum is a metal. It is
abundant. It has many uses. It comes from bauxite. Bauxite is an ore. Bauxite
looks like clay. Bauxite contains aluminum. It contains several other substances.
Workmen extract these other substances from the bauxite. They grind the
bauxite. They put it in tanks. Pressure is in the tanks. The other substances
form a mass. They remove the mass. They use filters. A liquid remains.
They put it through several other processes. It finally yields a chemical.
The chemical is powdery. It is white. The chemical is alumina. It is a
mixture. It contains aluminum. It contains oxygen. Workmen separate the
aluminum from the oxygen. They use electricity. They finally produce a
metal. The metal is light. It has a luster. The luster is bright. The luster
is silvery. This metal comes in many forms.