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Record Number: W4N10
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     I have double-spaced the text so that teachers can simply print it out and use it for exercises or for their own analysis.

      There are five people in my family my mom, my dad and 

my two brothers their names are Ray and Paul.  I live at 328 

Sandy Dr. First I think I will start with my dad. My dad works 

at Optimal Arts. He travels pretty much. He goes all over the 

place asking for money for his company. My dad's name is 

Bill. I will talk about my mom. Well she is pretty tall and she 

is also pretty. Everyday she stays home and watches my 

brother except when he goes to preschool. My mom's name 

is Sarah. I will talk about my big brother. He likes to play golf 

a lot. His best is an eighty-two on eighteen holes from the men's 

tee's. And that is good from the men's tee's. My brother is 13 

His name is Ray. Now my little brother Paul. He can be a 

really pain sometimes. Like when I am talking on the phone 

and sitting on the sofa he starts jumping on the sofa and I 

start bouncing up and down. But I like him a lot. He is three 

years old. His name is Paul. I will talk about myself.  Well I 

like playing golf also. My best score on eighteen holes is an 

eighty-six from the ladie's tee's. That is really good for me. 

My best from the men's tee's on nine holes is a forty-six on 

the hardest nine. I am nine years old. I will talk about Dierdorf 

Pupper Walter. Well he is a four legged creature He is a dog. 

He has brown and black fur. I like him a lot.  He is eleven 

years old. Yesterday was his birthday. My house is mosty 

made of bricks and the other part is made out of something 

else I don't know what it is though. I live at 423 Sandy Drive. 

My house is pretty big. We have a big back yard. I have the 

biggest bedroom in the house out of five rooms. Our basement 

is big. We have a pinball machine and a big ping-pong table. 

Most of the time I stay downstairs. Because it is cool down 

there. After I come in when it is hot outside I go down in the 

basement. Then I get cold so I go upstairs. My brother's room 

is the second biggest in the house. My parent's room is down 

the hall when you walk in. My little brothers room is in the 

hall also. So is the bathroom. We have a living room and a 

family room and a kitchen. Well that is all about my house.