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     I have double-spaced the text so that teachers can simply print it out and use it for exercises or for their own analysis. (Name was changed.)

My Brother

     My brother is who I am going to write about. My brother, 

Eddie, is very special to me, he takes me places and does things 

with me. One of the thing we do together that we both enjoy 

very much is when he helps me with my baseball. He helps me 

throw my curve and fastball when I have a game he always 

comes to watch, if I hit a homerun he runs and gets the ball 

when I get home he writes on the ball for me. He coached a 

team and I played on it when I was eight we won all our games. 

We bothe have a three wheeler, he made a trailer large enough 

to haul both of our three wheelers so he could take me with him 

when he went three wheeling. Eddie has been looking at some 

land. He wants to buy a wooded area where we could make 

three wheeler trails. He always takes me to the movies, 

bowling and the Pizza Hut when he goes.  He has a 1985 

Yamaha motorcycle he also takes me rides on it. Eddie is a 

driver for United Partical Service known as U.P.S., he has to 

wear a Brown uniform. He gets paid very good that is why he 

can do all of these things. Yesterday he went to Baltimore, 

Maryland to pick up next day air packages. His regular route, 

it is in Athens, MD., sometimes consists of three hundred 

boxes. Eddie doesn't mind the hard work, he is 6'5" tall and 

weights 190 pounds, also very strong. I could keep on writeing 

about my brother, as you see he is very special to me, What can 

I say he is my brother.