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     I have double-spaced the text so that teachers can simply print it out and use it for exercises or for their own analysis. (Name was changed.)

Bill Cowens

      My brother he is great in sport like football, basketball, and

baseball. He got an scholarship for football for 4 years. At home

he is real nice.  In football he broke a record for the most pass 

and the most yards. He got an big trophy for that too. He was 

the captain of the team. The team was doing good for most of 

the time. Then they kept on loosing the rest of the games.  One 

team they played, he played a good game because he was 

catching most of the passes that the quarterback threw to him. 

In basketball he is good because he can hit a jump shot, and a 

lay-up. They didn't loose that many games. He had been scoring 

20 and 30 points a game. He had been leading scores for the 

Wildcats.  They have been playing some good teams. He had 

been helping out a lot.  They went to the regionals and they lost 

because somebody had missed a lay-up. They have never 

played this team before. In baseball he is also a great player on 

shortstop.  He has got a great batting average, he is hitting a lot 

of homeruns. They have won the district, the whole team has 

been hitting good.  He has made some great plays.  He got great 

experience, I think he got personality also. The coach liked him 

very much. Sometimes he has got a bad attitude.  He gets 

anthing he wants, he is real spoiled.  I like him as my brother.