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Sally

       \-\Sally Thomson is my best friend. \-\She is {in 8th grade} and is=CV 14 years#NuA02 old. \-\Her birthday is May 31st. \-\Sally is around 5'3" tall and has=CV black hair \C\and she wears braces. \-\She can really fight good, \,\CS#24thats [RNPNwhy harley nobody fights her.] \-\She comes {from a tough family.} \-\Sally's father and grandmother=CS owns=SV the Thomson Gift and pawn shop {on West Sixth Avenue.} \-\Her mom and dad=CS are divorced=PV \C\but her mom remarried {to Sam Jones.} \-\She has a step-brother, a whole sister,=CC and three brothers.=CC \-\She has a pretty nice, and wild family. \-\She is living {with her mom, step-brother, and her step-dad.} \-\She goes {to her real dads} {on weekends} sometimes. \-\I have known her {since the first day} {of school.} \-\Kelly Marston introduced us, \C\and then {instead of me and Kelly best friends,} it was Sally and I.=CC \-\Last year#NuA02 it was Kelly and Sally [RAJFthat were best friends,] but not this year,#NuA04 [RAVFso Kelly got a little#NuA02 jealous.] \-\Sally use to date my brother Bill,#App01 \,\CS#25they went together and broke=CV up so many times#NuA07 [RAVFthat it isn't funny.] \-\She is now getting over Bill and is starting=CV to see*INFDO05 John, my cousin.#App02 \-\She has a thing {for the Donnes.} \-\She met John [RAVFwhen I took her {to Kings Dominion} {with me.}] \-\He won her a great big polar bear and a small kola bear.=CC \-\She has his class ring now. \-\She goes {to a catholic church} [RAJFwhich she doesn't like,] \,\CS#26[LAVFwhen shes eighteen] she said [RNDOshes coming {to my church,} Jamesville Assembly#App04{of God.}] \-\She likes it up there. \-\Sally Thomson is a good friend.
 
 
Analysis of Fragments, Comma-Splices and Run-ons

CS #24 -- Amplification (or Subordination) The "that" in "that's why" refers to, or repeats, the preceding main clause. The "why harley nobody fights her" can therefore be taken as a description (amplification) of how well she fights. "She can really fight well -- that's why hardley anybody fights with her." The second clause could be subordinated, but so doing would change the emphasis to the result, rather than the quality of her ability to fight: "She can really fight well, so that's why hardley anybody fights with her."
CS #25 -- Amplification: "Sally use to date my brother Bill -- they went together and brokeup so many times that it isn't funny." The second main clause amplifies the meaning of "used to date."
CS #26 -- Amplification: "She goes to a catholic church which she doesn't like -- when shes eighteenshe said shes coming to my church, Jamesville Assembly of God." The second main clause amplifies how much she doesn't like it.