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Notes for
Exercise # 3 Based on The Tale of Benjamin Bunny, by Beatrix Potter

The original text is:

     Little Benjamin took one look, and then, in half a minute less than no time, he hid himself and Peter and the onions underneath a large basket....
     The cat got up and stretched herself, and came and sniffed at the basket.
     Perhaps she liked the smell of onions!
     Anyway, she sat down upon the top of the basket.
     She sat there for five hours.
The first sentence was shortened for this exercise. My guess is that the three additional dots after "basket" are there to imply that time passed before the cat got up. [I do not think that you will find that explanation for the use of such dots in most grammar textbooks.] Note that Potter used "and" without any commas to separate the three direct objects -- "himself" and "Peter" and "onions."
     This passage was selected because of the second sentence. Note that the comma after "herself" implies a separation, in time, between 1)  the cat's getting up and stretching, and 2) her coming and sniffing. Again I have not seen examples of this in grammar textbooks. They usually simply state (as does the KISS instructional material) that commas are used to separate items in a series. That rule is a good starting point, but many cases, like this one, are not that simple.
     My guess is that most students will put a period after "onions." Thus Potter's exclamation point may raise some interesting discussion. A question mark would also be acceptable here, and would make the statement a rhetorical question.
     The comma after "anyway" has the effect of making "Anyway" an interjection in that it cuts it off from "sat down," which it might, without the comma, be considered as modifying.
     Some some students may get the effect of emphasis that Potter obtains with the italicized "five hours" by ending that sentence with an exclamation point.



     Little Benjamin took one look, and then he hid himself and Peter and the onions underneath a large basket.

     The cat got up and stretched herself, [#1] and came and sniffed at the basket.

     Perhaps she liked the smell of onions. or ! or ?

     Anyway, she sat down upon the top of the basket. or !

     She sat there for five hours! or .


Notes
1. I have simply followed Potter here, but if I had not seen Potter's text, I may not have put in any commas, or I might also have put in one after "up" and one after "came."

Analysis Key

     Little Benjamin took one look (DO), | and then he hid himself (DO) and Peter (DO) and the onions (DO) {underneath a large basket}. |

     The cat got up and stretched herself (DO), and came and sniffed {at the basket}. |

     Perhaps she liked the smell (DO) {of onions}. |

     Anyway, she sat down {upon the top} {of the basket}. |

     She sat there {for five hours}! |