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Exercise # 10 Based on
The Tale of the Flopsy Bunnies, by Beatrix Potter
Analysis Key

1. Presently a fly settled {on one} {of them}, [#1] | and it moved. |

2. The Flopsy Bunnies stirred a little [NuA] {in their sleep}, | but still they did not wake up. |

3. Benjamin and Flopsy were {in despair}, [#2] | they could not undo the string (DO). |

4. So Mr. McGregor did not get his tobacco (DO), | and Mrs. McGregor did

not get her rabbit skins (DO). |

5. Then the mouse came {out of her jam pot}, | and Benjamin took the paper bag

(DO) {off his head}, | and they told the doleful tale (DO). |

1. There is no comma after "them" in the original, but I decided to edit so as not to begin with an exception to the general rule.
2. Note the comma-splice. Although I have not had the time to do a formal study, my sense from working with her tales is that Potter uses a comma to join main clauses that express cause/effect relationships. This raises an interesting question about the causes of comma-splices that we teachers mark as errors in students' writing.