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Exercise # 1 Based on
The Tale of Johnny Town Mouse by Beatrix Potter
An Exercise in Capitalization and Punctuation
Analysis Key

In the Gutenberg edition, the passage appears as:

    With the utmost politeness he introduced Timmy Willie to nine other mice, all with long tails and white neckties. Timmy Willie's own tail was insignificant. Johnny Town-mouse and his friends noticed it; but they were too well bred to make personal remarks.
The only exception is that a semicolon follows "remarks," and that is followed by a main clause that includes a subordinate clause. I have been trying to keep subordinate clauses out of the third grade exercises, so I dropped the final main clause. Some students will probably capitalize "mouse" in "Town-mouse," and I would expect most of the students to leave out the hyphen. For third graders, these are not things to worry about. I would expect the students to get all the other capital letters correct.
     As for punctuation, some students may put a comma after "politeness." That is totally acceptable. The comma after "mice" is optional, but probably preferred since it is a nonrestrictive modifier. The students should get the apostrophe in "Willie's," and if they don't, this exercise serves as a reminder. Potter used a semicolon after "it." Current usage would probably opt for a comma before the "but." However a period and capital "B" are also acceptable.

Analysis:

    {With the utmost politeness} he introduced Timmy Willie (DO) {to nine other mice},

all [#1] {with long tails and white neckties}. | Timmy Willie's own tail was insignificant

(PA). | Johnny Town-mouse and his friends noticed it (DO); | but they were too

well bred [#2] to make personal remarks [#3]. |


Notes
1. Depending on whether one wants to consider it to be a pronoun or an adjective, "all" can be explained as an appositive to "mice" or as a post-positioned adjective to "mice."
2. An argument could be made that "bred" is part of a passive verb, but most grammarians will probably consider it to be a predicate adjective.
3. "Remarks" is the direct object of the infinitive "to make." The infinitive functions as an adverb to "too" (which modifies "well" which modifies "bred"). [Note that if the "too" is dropped, the meaning of the sentence changes significantly -- "they were well bred to make personal remarks."