My Porcelain Doll
1. Place parentheses ( ) around each prepositional
2. Underline verbs twice, their subjects once, and label complements
("PA," "PN," "IO," or "DO").
3. Draw an arrow from every adjective and adverb to the word it modifies.
was my birthday and I was turning eight, I got a porcelain doll from
my Grandma. I hope I get to keep
it for my whole life. That is how special it is
to me. It is a ballet dancer. Her
hair is braided. She has roses in her headband.
Her skirt is pink. She has a rose
on her white blouse. Her ballet shoes are pink.
She has blue eyes. Her hair is blondish
brown. Her lips are rosy pink. Her skin is
whitish peachish. She has a beautiful
pink bow on the edge of her sleeves. She
makes beautiful music when you wind
her up. She is the most beautiful thing I've
II. Do a statistical analysis:
1. Count the total number of words in the selection (TW).
2. Count the total number of sentences in the selection (TS).
3. Count the total number of words that are in prepositional phrases
4. Count the total number of words that you were Unable to
5. Divide the total number of words (TW) by the total number of sentences
(TS). This will give you the average number of words that you use in a
sentence. You can compare that number to the numbers in the statistical
exercises that you will do and/or to the average for your class. (Remember,
like Goldilocks, you do not want that number to be too hot (high) or too
cold (low). The best place to be in somewhere near the middle.)
6. Divide the total number of words that are in prepositional
phrases (TWPP) by the total number of words (TW). You can compare this
number to those in the samples and your class average. It will give you
an idea of how much you are using prepositional phrases (primarily to add
descriptive details of people, things, times and places).
7. Subtract the total number of words that you were Unable to
(UtE) from the total number of words in what you wrote (TW). This will
give you the approximate number of words (in your own writing) that you
already grammatically explain (NCE). Divide this number by the total number
of words (TW). (This shows approximately how much of
your own writing that you can already explain.)