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Notes for
"HARRY POTTER AND THE LEGILIMENS LESSONS"
MIMC: One Set of Sentences Yields Two Paragraphs

Contributed by Irene Meaker, Lincoln Public Schools, Lincoln, NE

See the exercise L6.2 Logic

     If you have not already read them, please see the notes on MIMC exercises in the introduction to this month. The following, of course, present only one of many possibilities for responding to this exercise.



TOPIC SENTENCE A 

     Dumbledore feels it is important for Harry to take Occlumency lessons, although Harry never really learns Occlumency.

1. Harry had been having dreams about the Department of Mysteries, or Voldemort had been invading Harry’s mind and directing him to the Department of Mysteries.

Voldemort had been invading Harry’s mind and directing him to the Department of Mysteries, [so Harry had been having dreams about the Department of Mysteries.] [CE - Result]
2. Sirius, Harry’s godfather, doesn’t want Harry to take Occlumency lessons from Snape, but Sirius defers to Dumbledore’s order.
[Although Sirius, Harry’s godfather, doesn’t want Harry to take Occlumency lessons from Snape] he defers to Dumbledore’s order. [CE - Concession]

Sirius, Harry’s godfather, [who doesn’t want Harry to take Occlumency lessons from Snape] defers to Dumbledore’s order. [Identity]

3. Harry didn’t trust Snape, but Snape never actually hurt Harry. 
[Although Harry didn’t trust Snape,] Snape never actually hurt Harry. [CE - Concession]

Harry, [who didn’t trust Snape], was never actually hurt by him. [Identity]

Snape, [who wasn't trusted by Harry,] never actually hurt him. [Identity]

4. Harry worried that Snape would attack him, but that was what the Occlumency lessons were all about: Harry needed to defend his mind from invasions by Voldemort.
[Although Harry worried that Snape would attack him,] that was what the Occlumency lessons were all about: Harry needed to defend his mind from invasions by Voldemort. [CE - Concession]
5. Over time Harry can go longer and longer before Snape breaks into his mind, but Harry is unwilling to see that Snape is helping him.
Over time Harry, [who is unwilling to see that Snape is helping him,] can go longer and longer before Snape breaks into his mind. [Identity]
6. Snape regularly invaded Harry’s memories; finally, he was able to enter Snape’s mind as well.
[Although Snape regularly invaded Harry’s memories,] finally, Harry was able to enter Snape’s mind as well. [CE - Concession]
7. After a particularly bad episode, Harry quits going to Occlumency lessons; Hermione tries to get Harry to resume his lessons, but Ron believes, like Harry, that Snape may be a threat.
[When, after a particularly bad episode, Harry quits going to Occlumency lessons,] Hermione tries to get Harry to resume his lessons, [even though Ron believes, like Harry, that Snape may be a threat.] [Time][CE - Concession]

TOPIC SENTENCE B

     While Dumbledore feels it is important, Harry never really learns Occlumency.

1. Harry had been having dreams about the Department of Mysteries, or Voldemort had been invading Harry’s mind and directing him to the Department of Mysteries.

Harry had been having dreams about the Department of Mysteries, [because Voldemort had been invading Harry’s mind and directing him to the Department of Mysteries.] [CE - Cause]
2. Sirius, Harry’s godfather, doesn’t want Harry to take Occlumency lessons from Snape, but Sirius defers to Dumbledore’s order.
Sirius, Harry’s godfather, [who eventually defers to Dumbledore’s order,] doesn’t want Harry to take Occlumency lessons from Snape. [Identity]
3. Harry didn’t trust Snape, but Snape never actually hurt Harry. 
[Although Snape never actually hurt Harry,] Harry didn’t trust Snape. [CE - Concession]
4. Harry worried that Snape would attack him, but that was what the Occlumency lessons were all about: Harry needed to defend his mind from invasions by Voldemort.
Harry worried that Snape would attack him [because he didm't understand that  that was what the Occlumency lessons were all about]: Harry needed to defend his mind from invasions by Voldemort.[CE - Cause]
5. Over time Harry can go longer and longer before Snape breaks into his mind, but Harry is unwilling to see that Snape is helping him.
Over time Harry, [who can go longer and longer before Snape breaks into his mind,] is unwilling to see that Snape is helping him. [Identity]
6. Snape regularly invaded Harry’s memories; finally, he was able to enter Snape’s mind as well.
Snape regularly invaded Harry’s memories, [even though,  finally, he was able to enter Snape’s mind as well.]  [CE - Concession]
7. After a particularly bad episode, Harry quits going to Occlumency lessons; Hermione tries to get Harry to resume his lessons, but Ron believes, like Harry, that Snape may be a threat.
After a particularly bad episode, Harry quits going to Occlumency lessons [so Hermione tries to get Harry to resume his lessons], but Ron believes, like Harry, that Snape may be a threat. [CE - Result]