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A Sentence-Combining Exercise
The Opening Paragraph of 
Persuasion, by  Jane Austen


Directions: Read the passage all the way through. You will notice that the sentences are short and choppy. Study the passage, and then rewrite it in a better way. You may combine sentences, change the order of words, and omit words that are repeated too many times. But try not to leave out any of the information. 

     Sir Walter Elliot lived in Kellynch Hall. Kellynch Hall is in 

Somersetshire.  He was a man. For  his own amusement, he never took 

up any book but the Baronetage. There he found occupation for an idle

hour. And there he found consolation in a distressed one. There his 

faculties were roused into admiration and respect.  He contemplated 

the limited remnant of the earliest patents. Sometimes unwelcome 

sensations arose from domestic affairs.  In the Baronetage, these 

sensations changed naturally into pity and contempt. They did so as he 

turned over the almost endless creations of the last century. Sometimes

in the Baronetage every other leaf was powerless. Then he could read 

his own history. His interest in this never failed.  This was the page at 

which the favorite volume always opened:

"ELLIOT OF KELLYNCH HALL.

"Walter Elliot died. He was born on March 1, 1760. He was married on

July 15, 1784. He married Elizabeth. She was the daughter of James 

Stevenson, Esq.  Mr. Stevenson was of South Park. South Park is in

the county of Gloucester. Elizabeth died in 1800.  With her he had 

children.  They had Elizabeth. She was born on June 1, 1785. They had

Anne. Ann was born on August 9, 1787. They had a still-born son. He 

was born on November 5, 1789. They had Mary. Mary was born on 

November 20, 1791."