The outline for the following paper has three subsections under III: A. Lack of sleep, B. Loss of concentration, and C. Physical Strain.  The writer combined III. B. and III. C. into one paragraph. The topic sentence for that paragraph, however, only mentions III. B. (Loss of concentration).  As a result, physical strain, which, according to the outline is equally important, gets lost in the body of the paragraph. Avoid this problem by beginning a paragraph that contains more than one item with a topic sentence that includes all of them: 

Original: 
     The lack of sleep could also mean a loss of concentration, making it difficult to keep your focused.

Revised:
     The lack of sleep could also mean both a loss of concentration and physical strain. Sleep depravation makes it difficult to keep yourself focused.

(1)     More and more people are choosing to continue their education at colleges and universities around the world. Some of which choose to stay on campus or close by, while others decide to travel larger distances daily to get to their destination. Hospitality students should consider a few important details first before making such a decision. All day scheduling forces full time, commuting students to struggle with fatigue as well as a loss of contact with others.

(2)     In the Hospitality division, all day scheduling can be a common problem for many people. When in class all day, it is extremely difficult to find time to do simple things such as eat a meal or even do homework. Without having a spare hour or two in your thirty-hour school week, it is sometimes hard to work on research and term papers that are due, resulting in grade loss. It is usually very late until you return home from class and driving. This often entails not eating dinner until eight, nine, or even quite possibly, ten o’clock at night. 

(3)     When you are in one class straight through into another, you do not get a break, which in turn, means no down time. Relaxation seems as though it is impossible to obtain. Eventually this could cause health risks to that individual. 

(4)      Fighting with fatigue becomes an everyday event. Your gradual loss of sleep mounts. After you get up at five a.m., get around, drive for an hour, head into a six hour long lab, and then have classes back to back all day until five at night, and drive home: you have put in a thirteen hour day. When you finally eat supper, get cleaned up, and slip into bed, suddenly that annoying alarm goes off and it is time to go through it all again. 

(5)     The lack of sleep could also mean a loss of concentration, making it difficult to keep your focused. Attitudes may come across as snippety when you only have five or six hours of sleep, instead of the recommended eight hours of rest. Physical strain becomes immense towards the middle to end of each semester. You drag your feet wherever you go, with whatever you do especially before a lab. Your weakness may not be visible to others, but the headaches are still very evident to you.

(6)     Losing contact with others does not always make itself visible immediately. Over time you may have limited connections with people from school, because of the lack of time needed to even give them a simple phone call. For instance, it would be rude to call them at five in the morning before you leave your house, after ten o’clock at night when you have returned home. This could result in fewer newfound friendships while you are in college. You lose touch with a majority of your friends "back home". Most of them probably attend another college and have classes when you do not or vise-versa. Seeing your family only seems slightly possible on the weekends, that is if you’re not sleeping and they are in fact home. In addition, you miss out on everything that is going on in your community such as follows: soccer games, town plays, or even social events. 

(7)     When Hospitality students make their decision as to choose whatever living arrangements students feel will best benefit them during college, they should consider a few things first. By choosing to have a full time schedule and commute to their destination, they may cause themselves fatigue and a lost sense of contact with others.