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Rewriting: Appositives & Subordinate Clauses
Based on The Queen of the Pirate Isle, by Bret Harte

A.

1. App: Now, one {of them}, the girl [App], had actually rolled {out of the slide} and was hanging {over the chasm}. |

SC: Now, one of them, who was a girl, had actually rolled out of the slide and was hanging over the chasm.

MC: Now, one of them was a girl, and she had actually rolled out of the slide and was hanging over the chasm.

2. App: Here, too, the prevailing colours {of the mountains}, red [App] and white [App] and green [App], most showed themselves (DO). |
SC: Here, too, the prevailing colours of the mountains, which were red and white and green, most showed themselves.

MC: Here, too, the prevailing colours of the mountains most showed themselves. They were red and white and green.

3. App: An hour [NuA] {after luncheon} [#1], one day [NuA], Polly, Hickory Hunt, her cousin [App], and Wan Lee, a Chinese page [App], were crossing the nursery floor (DO) {in a Chinese junk}. |
SC: An hour after luncheon, one day, Polly, Hickory Hunt, who was her cousin, and Wan Lee, who was a Chinese page, were crossing the nursery floor in a Chinese junk.

MC: Hickory Hunt was Polly's cousin. Wan Lee was a Chinese page. An hour after luncheon, one day, Polly, Hickory, and Wan Lee were crossing the nursery floor in a Chinese junk.

B. 

1. MC: She would have taken Bridget (DO) {into her confidence}. | Bridget was her nurse (PN). |

SC: She would have taken Bridget, who was her nurse, into her confidence.

App: She would have taken Bridget, her nurse, into her confidence.

2. MC: {On the ridge} they met one "Patsey (DO)." | He was the son (PN) {of a neighbour}. |
SC: On the ridge they met one "Patsey," who was the son of a neighbour.

App: On the ridge they met one "Patsey," the son of a neighbour.

3. MC: Your Majesty's own dolly is Lady Mary (PN), | and she broke the spell (DO)! |
SC: Your Majesty's own dolly, who is Lady Mary, broke the spell!

App: Your Majesty's own dolly, Lady Mary, broke the spell!

Note
1. Note how "after luncheon" can be seen either as an adjective to "hour" and/or as an adverb to "were crossing." Based on the KISS Psycholinguistic Model, I've connected it to "hour" because the perceiver's brain tends to chunk as soon as meaningfully  possible.