then my mom then my oldest sister Cyndee and then me and 

Crystal, Tara, and Amanda / they're my youngest sisters. /

My dad is 30 years old and is a chef. / My mom is 28 and

doesn't work. / My oldest sister is 12 / she's {in 7th grade} /

she's a brat. /I'm 9 / and I'm {in the 4th grade}. / My young

sister is 7 and {in 2nd grade} / My other young sister is 2. / And

the other is 3 months old. / Eddie, my dad, Tara, Mom 

Crystal, and amanda have brown hair. / Me and Cyndee

have blond hair. / My, Cyndee, Crystal, and mom have

brown eyes. / Eddi, Tara, and Amanda have blue eyes. /

     I live {in a brick hous} {on fox Dr.} / There are three rooms 

living room, kitchen, and bathroom. / There are four

bedrooms. / I share a bedroom {with my sister} Cyndee. / I

have a basement {with a workshop laundry room and famly room}. /

I have a back yard {with a hammock and clothes line and an ugly 

evergreen bush}. /And {in my front yard} I have some flowers

and bushes. / My house has 13 windows and 3 doors. / 

Only one bathroom (DO?) / and that's bad! /

     The worst day{in my life }was [Adv to "was" ^Note  when I was

tired] and [Adv to "was" we had to walk all day {at the zoo}].

We saw the Monkeys, Zebras, prarie dogs, lions, tigers, 

reptiles, birds, and seals. / Then we ate pizza / and I saw a 

elephant, giraffe. / I was eight / and I didn't like going {to 

the zoo}. / and I got to see the baby hippos / and I don't like

im. / We also got to ride the metro / and it really went fast. /

It made a stop every 12 secounds / and more and more and more 

and more people got on / and I kept on falling down, [Adv to

"kept falling" Because I had to stand [Adv to "had to stand" 

because there was too many people {on the metro}.]] /